Wednesday, October 31, 2012

Halloweensie Contest 2012





The Contest: write a 100 word Halloween story appropriate for children (title not included in the 100 words), using the words witch, bat, and "trick-or-treat". Your story can be scary, funny or anything in between, poetry or prose, but it will only count for the contest if it includes those 3 words and is 100 words (you can go under, but not over!) Get it? Halloweensie - because it's not very long and it's for little people :)  Click here to read all the other silly, scary, and spooky entries!


Here's my entry!


JACK O'LANTERN

Jack O’Lantern was an orange-headed kid
With a very round face, a stem on his lid.

On Halloween night, Jack met an old witch.
He begged for a spell and presented his pitch.

“I want to trick-or-treat like a regular boy
In spooky attire.  I love Almond Joys.”

Jack guzzled her brew, full of bat wings
And all sorts of other odd, horrible things.

“Jack?” Joe asked.  “You’re as white as a ghost.”
"A witch threw a pumpkin. I thought you were toast!”

“My pumpkin head’s gone! I feel….BOO!” Jack haunted.
“Turning into a ghost was not what I wanted.” 

(100 words exactly!)

14 comments:

  1. How fun and clever. Really nice entry, Laura.

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  2. Excellent, Laura! I heart that orange-headed kid.

    Sandy got in my way. I tried to kick her with my boot, but she insisted on bringing wind and snow in her little bag of treats.

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    1. I hope you are recovering. Sandy was a whopper!

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  3. This is really cute, Laura. I love how he wanted to drink the potion.

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  4. Poor Jack - I can('t) see him now! Good fun!

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  5. This is FANTASTIC!

    Poor Jack.
    We must watch what we witch for.

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  6. Wonderful twist, Laura! The old you might just get what you wish for! :) Thanks for a very creative, fun, entertaining entry - so glad you joined in the fun! :)

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    1. Thanks, Susanna. Your contest was tons of fun, as usual. Except that my original draft was nearly 200 words! This was an incredible lesson in revision. So thanks for that, too!

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  7. Great entry, Laura. I loved it from the first line "orange headed kid."

    I agree that these little contests Susanna hosts are great revision practice. I always end up having to pare down to the bare essentials. Such a good lesson!

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  8. This was great, and I loved the surprise ending! Julie

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  9. Well, he learned an important lesson: be specific, or you could be haunted by the outcome. He did ask for spooky :)

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  10. So funny, Laura...love the potion-drinking pumpkin...reminds me of Alice in Wonderland.
    Clever idea and great rhyme. :)

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